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Do you love everything in the world? Do you love extreme sports? Do love war? (I know you don't but I'm just trying to make my point clear. ^^) Be careful when you make general statements like "I love all things in the world." I know what you mean but others may not.
Kimberley, do you mean that Mr. Kim's concluding sentence is too general?
How about change the last pharagraph. "I like to do many hobbies during my free time." or "I like to experience many kinds of things."
Jennifer has the right idea but be careful of your wording. Many means that there are a lot. You mention 5 or 6 things you like to do so if you think that's a lot, you can say that you like doing many things. It's all about the word choice.
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